"When you write a short story you should be trying to suck the reader into your world. Your story should be so detailed and interesting that they get lost in your story and forget about everything else that is going on in the world around them.
The most important part of creating a fantastic world for your readers is to allow them to imagine what is going on by describing what is going on rather than just telling them.
In the following activity you will be given a situation to describe. You will also be given one of the five senses to use as the basis of your description. You must re-write the situation/part of the story to make it come alive for your readers. You should aim to be as descriptive as possible.
HINT: Imagine you are in the following situations and must describe it over the phone to somebody on the other side of the world. You cannot show them what is happening but you can describe it in enough detail that they will be able to feel, see, smell, taste or hear what is going on."
Situation to re-write: It was a hot summer’s day. Sense: Sight
The fan turns slow useless circles above me as I watch the sweat trickle from places I didn’t even know sweat could. Outside it looks like the world is melting. The sun is playing tricks on my eyes as it creates puddles all across the road. It looks like the pavement is melting away in protest of the heat. The flowers too are protesting as the weep under the spiteful eyes of the sun.
Situation to re-write: It was time for breakfast. Sense: Smell/Taste
I wake up to the delicious smell of sweet and sour candy as it drifted into my room. The intoxicating smell opened my eyes wide awake, hypnotizing me to walk a little closer. I sat down and breathed in the enchanting smell of eggs, bacon and cinnamon toast as I took a bite. My tastebuds danced exotically upon my tongue as my hunger heals from my restless sleep.
The cliffs collided into each other with a growling thud. The clouds were screaming in protest, killing our ear buds with a high pitched shriek. The house is creaking, trying to endure the sudden echoing gunshots.
Situation to re-write: She cuddled up to her teddy bear Sense: Touch/Feel
Cold air bit to her body as she freezes in the hasty icy climate. The only warmth is beside her, calling her to come closer. As she grabs her teddy bear, she feels as though a jolt of fire burned through her hand. The teddy bear clings onto her has she cuddles the bear. An explosion of warmth blasted onto her body as she went sound to sleep.
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